Below are sample introductions written by students who came from cultures that often begin papers with abstract or global statements. American readers will think that the student is stating the obvious and not getting to the point of the paper quickly enough.
(I have kept the grammar errors of the original versions so
you can see typical errors of non-native writers. It is important that you not become distracted by the
grammatical errors when reading a student’s paper since fixing the grammar
will not significantly improve the development of the ideas and the direct
approach of academic writing.)
Example 1: Research-Funding-and
Human, since the childhood, was threatened by different
diseases, This kind of intimidation
will be after us until we die. Many
diseases are curable, but others are fatal illnesses which have been
investigated. Such explorations
required enthusiastic researchers and funding.
Practically, there have been quite a number of researchers who devoted
their time for this search. However,
funding is still a problem……..
Example 2: Growing Up
It is not difficult to understand that growing up is something natural which falls on everybody sooner or later. It involves a process of both physical and psychological changes such as changes in our body as well as moral, emotional and physical maturity. We shall have the opportunity to accept our limitations and to develop our potentials. Moreover, we will also start to concern about some ideas and expectations about our future. To me, the influential factors contribute to growing up are related to perusing knowledge in school.
Example 3: Men
There are many unequal things that often happen between men
and women. Men and women usually
have unequal power, income and also have unequal share of housework inside the
family. People of different sex are
interested in different activities. The
personality traits of men and women tend to be complementary, so each sex may
bring to a relationship qualities that others may lack.
Example 4: Politics
In our world politics and religion have been two important issues in human life. Foundations of different religions consistently bring up the issue of whether religion and politics should be mixed or whether they should be distinct in their own right. Governments and politicians have been often dishonest. Changing with the time and situation. On the other hand, religion represents trust, honest and consistency, and its rules rarely can change under any circumstances. In order to understand this conflict better, we will look at the present situation in Iran, where the religion of Islam is playing a role in politics.