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Below are sample introductions written by students who came from cultures that often begin papers with abstract or global statements.  American readers will think that the student is stating the obvious and not getting to the point of the paper quickly enough.

(I have kept the grammar errors of the original versions so you can see typical errors of non-native writers.  It is important that you not become distracted by the grammatical errors when reading a student’s paper since fixing the grammar will not significantly improve the development of the ideas and the direct approach of academic writing.)

Example 1:  Research-Funding-and Diseases

Human, since the childhood, was threatened by different diseases,  This kind of intimidation will be after us until we die.  Many diseases are curable, but others are fatal illnesses which have been investigated.  Such explorations required enthusiastic researchers and funding.  Practically, there have been quite a number of researchers who devoted their time for this search.  However, funding is still a problem……..

Example 2:  Growing Up


It is not difficult to understand that growing up is something natural which falls on everybody sooner or later.  It involves a process of both physical and psychological changes such as changes in our body as well as moral, emotional and physical maturity.  We shall have the opportunity to accept our limitations and to develop our potentials.  Moreover, we will also start to concern about some ideas and expectations about our future.  To me, the influential factors contribute to growing up are related to perusing knowledge in school.

Example 3:  Men and Women

There are many unequal things that often happen between men and women.  Men and women usually have unequal power, income and also have unequal share of housework inside the family.  People of different sex are interested in different activities.  The personality traits of men and women tend to be complementary, so each sex may bring to a relationship qualities that others may lack.

Example 4:  Politics and Religion

In our world politics and religion have been two important issues in human life.  Foundations of different religions consistently bring up the issue of whether religion and politics should be mixed or whether they should be distinct in their own right.  Governments and politicians have been often dishonest.  Changing with the time and situation.  On the other hand, religion represents trust, honest and consistency, and its rules rarely can change under any circumstances.  In order to understand this conflict better, we will look at the present situation in Iran, where the religion of Islam is playing a role in politics.

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